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Sunday, February 27, 2005
A 3 day event that celebrates fire hazards.
What? I don't have any pictures of the lanterns yet :(
Indeed I spent the last two nights at the Chinese Lantern festival and amazingly enough, again for the 2nd year in a row I did not see anyone 'accidently' set their paper lanterns on fire. Seriously, as a kid I was always confounded by how I managed to burn mine to a crisp despite how carelessly careful I was!
But this isn't the true motive to my posting. I need criticism *people randomly criticize Mew's behavious and what not* No no, not like that!! >:( I meant of a poem I was thinking of entering at the school's poetry slam.
It's still in a rough stage, so I haven't fully worked out the punctuation or finalised any of the lines and without further ado here it is:
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A terrible voice knocked me down
my vision flying asunder.
Next to me lay a wreckage,
a crazy dance began;
my head launching to break his foot.
Or, was it the other way round?
Sentences frayed before they started
as another pain made me frown
I had a really bad gut feeling.
The blood dripped with tears I didn't own,
A bitter silence came sweetly next.
Life didn't seem quite right,
Staring regretfully at the broken toy.
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Go ahead, critique it. I do not fear it :P |
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